Wednesday, January 9, 2013

Continuation Writing

The air was earthy and cool underneath the roof of the old stream bridge. Rainwater had made it's way through a gap in the roof, and was dripping steadily down onto the still form of a little girl. Although she could feel the persistent tap of the drops on her back, she refused to move. She had decided quite a while ago that she was going to curl up in a ball and lay on that bridge until she died.

She was feeling uninspired by the world and it's irritating inhabitants --especially BeeBo. BeeBo was the worst and she hated him. Most of all she hated that he was so good at finding things. Practically every week BeeBo would appear out of nowhere and disturb her when she was trying to be alone in the forest near their village.

This time will be different. She thought to herself  to take her mind off of the 'plip-plop' off the droplets. *plip... plop... plip... plop...* She stared ahead and cleared her throat. *plip.. plop... plip... plop...* Wait a second she thought to herself. Did it just get louder? She listened closer. *plop... plip... plip.. plop...* She knew it! It was getting louder... but how? With growing alarm, she scanned the area. She saw nothing out of the ordinary. *PLIP, PLOP, PLIP! PLOP!* It sounded almost like a yell now. Frantic, she closed her eyes and wrenched herself over onto her other side. As soon as she did so, the plopping ceased.

Her head hit something smooth... almost leathery. When she opened her eyes she saw two black leather boots staring back at her. She groaned loudly. "Well, hey there crazy" chimed Bee as he nudged her face with his shoe. She pushed his foot away and sat up rubbing her head. "Why are you here?" she grumbled "..and where's Bo?". "Bo's on the roof practicing his rain noises" Bee replied, ignoring her first question. "Really." she glared at him "Can you just please go away so I can die in peace?"

"Haha, no!" came Bo's voice from behind her. "You don't need to die anymore. I found a solution to our problem!" "There is a temple way out east with a doctor who can find the other half of you" said Bee. "We will get you fixed up and then we'll go get married!"

But before anything could happen or be explained, there was an avalanche and everyone died.

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8 comments:

  1. m a r c oJanuary 10, 2013 at 9:03 AM

    Intriguing. What is the girl's name? I like the "other half" problem/issue for that seems to exist in the world.

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  2. SavitaJanuary 10, 2013 at 9:20 AM

    This is interesting and I want to read more of it. I like the use of sounds.

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  3. UnknownJanuary 10, 2013 at 9:23 AM

    I would like to know more about this story! It is very interesting. I really enjoyed the description you used in the first paragraph.

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  4. FatimaJanuary 10, 2013 at 9:29 AM

    I liked this! I enjoyed reading the detail of the sounds because I can imagine hearing it!

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  5. Neff RogersJanuary 10, 2013 at 9:32 AM

    I think you should make this longer. I really enjoyed it. I loved the descritions

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  6. UnknownJanuary 10, 2013 at 9:33 AM

    I was not expecting the ending. I liked your idea about the other half she was missing and I would love to see the story continue

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  7. Ellen.January 10, 2013 at 9:35 AM

    This is really interesting and I like how descriptive you are. I think that changing the size of the font when describing sound was a really nice touch and I would like to see more of this story!

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  8. JjaquyshJanuary 10, 2013 at 9:40 AM

    the onomatopoeia was fantastic

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